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The issue of whether playing a sport is an important experience to children has sparked a heated debate. Given that students have been exposed to heavier burdens from school tasks and daily lives than before, it is advisable to enhance their body condition by encouraging them to engage in team sports. Games provide students with energy, which is essential in maintaining both mental and physical health. By interacting with peers in competitive ways, students are more likely to be equipped with an optimistic attitude toward life, paving the way for stronger resilience in tackling future challenges.

A typical instance is that students who participate in basketball tournaments regularly in school clubs are believed to be more positive while encountering unexpected issues, such as divorce of their parents or family financial frustrations. This is because they are familiar with requiring help from teachers and friends-who act as their team members in games. As a result, they are building up supportive networks or even accumulating relationships that profoundly and sustainably encompass them.

Although I partially agree with Angela's viewpoint that parents often play a negative role in games, she overlooks the fact that this problem is manageable through targeted communication, and we should always focus on main goals, not byproducts.