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第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。MywifeandIwantedtoshareournewhomewithfamilyandfriendsbyhostingasmallgatheringintheearlysummer.Shehadpreparedlotsofsnacks,whilemyjobwastohavethebackyardinorder.Therewasplentyofspaceforthekidstorunandplay.TherewasjustonethingIhadn'tcountedon:MybrotherchosetobringhisdogToby,a50-poundballoffire.Thoughfriendly,hecouldeasilyknockovermyniece'ssmallboysandmysix-month-oldgranddaughter.So,whenmybrothershowedup,IaskedhimtowatchTobyandkeephimoutside.у)lowoil#edMyplanwasworkingoutjustfineTobywasusinganduphisenergybyrunningbackandforthinthebackyardandgivingthekidsplentyofroom.Unexpectedly,aftersupper,theweatherchanged.Itstartedtorainandeveryonewentindoors.Itwasanawkwardmoment.Ididn'twantTobytoberunningaroundinthehouse,andmybrotherwasn'thappywithdrivinghomewithawetdog.Eventually,mybrotherdecidedtoleaveratherthanforcetheissue.Afewdayspassed,andIhadn'theardanythingfrommybrother.Itextedhimandexpressedwishesforhimtocomeoutagain.Hisreplycameasasurpriseashock,actually:"Notachance."Clearly,hewasunhappyoverthewaywehadparted.Afterall,Ihadlefthimlittlechoice.Well,he'llgetoverit,Ireasoned.Twomonthspassed.MywifesuggestedIgetintouchwithmybrother,butIresisted,thinkingheshouldcallfirst.However,myoconscience(良心)keptbotheringme.Itriedtoputmyselfinmybrother'sshoes.Hewasfacinghealthissuesandhiswifeofthirty-fiveyearshadpassedawayafewmonthsearlier.Tobywashisconstantcompanion,theonewhokepthimgoing.注意:(1)续写词数应为150个左右;(2)请按如下格式作答。Irealizeditwasmewhowasatfault.Withthebiscuitsmywifehadmade,Iarrivedatmybrother'sdoor.
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23.阅读下面的材料,根据要求写作。(60分)她耗费如此多的心智和资财,来修筑这条并不能给她带来直接好处的道路,到底是因了对亡夫的深爱,还是对苍生的博爱?(丘脊梁《水边书》)我把我树上的果子摘了分给村里的娃娃们,我心里可有多……·幸福!.…·我栽下一拨树,心里就想,我死了,后世人在那树上摘着吃果子,他们就会说,这是以前村里的光棍老汉德顺栽下的.(路遥《人生》)以上材料引发了你怎样的联想和思考?请联系现实生活写一篇文章。要求:选准角度,确定立意,明确文体,自拟标题;不要套作,不得抄袭;不得泄露个人信息;不少于800字。以下是从图片中提取的原文(完整、无修改): 作文得分:4823.写作(60分)以博爱之举铸人生丰盈千百年来,人们对人生意义的探索从未停止。有人说,那是举世闻名,名垂千古;又有人说,那是不行坏事,活好自我。于我看,人生真正的意义,在于跳出小我,博爱,在于以惠及他人为自我幸福,如此,方可成就丰盈人生。博爱是为困难中的人们重拾生活下去的希望。如古时中益用重金与心骨修建了水道,为无数望而生畏的人们重燃希望,他因之而经历无限痛楚,便不愿让这种痛苦再出现在其他人身上,此番壮举,难道不可称为博爱吗?他未曾囿于内心的伤感,而是主动去改变现状,为他人撑起一把伞。昔者屠呦呦目睹疟疾给人们带来的灾难与痛苦,用无数次失败成就了青蒿素,更挽救了无数的生命与他们的家庭,此番博爱,可不谓之不重。人生百年转瞬即逝,每个人都是时代长河中一朵小小的浪花,转瞬便必归于平静。当我们以博爱去惠及他人,便会在这长河中涌起那独属的波澜,留下生命的足迹。幸福是为他人谋福祉,成人之美,乐人之乐。路遥笔下德顺为村里孩子们摘果子,为后世人们种果树,他不把幸福定义为自身的欢愉,而将其视为给其他人带来欢乐,这份广博的爱,令人动容。遥想那年张桂梅在山中建一所女子中学的豪言壮志般的讥讽,如今都成为现实,一批批孩子从大山中送出,向世界展现自己的锋芒,她的脸上堆满了喜悦,她把能为孩子带来美好生活作为人生的追求与幸福的泉源,另她被无数人们敬仰与歌颂,她的事迹也必定在几代人心中记忆。从博爱到人生的幸福,从人生的丰盈到为后世留下记忆。康有为“我以我血荐轩辕”推动了革命,袁隆平为下乘凉梦永远留在人们心中……他们同我们一样都是时代中的一粒沙,却能在有限的生命中,散发出无限的光与热,这是博爱的力量,也是另人赞叹的奇迹。以博爱之举,铸人生丰盈。当生命的长度无法由我们控制,便在有限中拓展生命的广度与深度。让我们铸牢博爱之精神,深耕精神原野,为个人,社会,国家传递我们的力量。
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第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Onhiswaybackhomefromschool,10-year-oldLeostoppedwhenheheardaweakcrycomingfrombehindabush.Partingtheleaves,hefoundasmall,dustydogshakingthere.Oneofitsbacklegswaspressedtightlyagainstitsbody,athinlineofbloodtracingdowntoitspaw(JF).Thedog'sbig,darkeyesheldamixoffearandpain.Therewasnocollararounditsneck—itmusthavebeenastrayDYN).Whilehewasstaringatthepoordog,Leo'sheartached.Itremindedhimofthelovelydogheusedtowalkafterschool.ItbelongedtoMrs.Clark'sgranddaughter,whohadtoleaveitwithhergrandmaforafewmonths.Leo,whowassavingupforanewbasketball,hadhappilytakenthejobofcaringforit.Hegrewdeeplyattachedtotheplayfuldog,andwhenthegranddaughtereventuallyreturnedtotakeitback,Leofeltitsabsencelikeaphysicalache.Forweeksafterward,LeowouldfindhimselfglancingtowardMrs.Clark'syard,hopingtoseethatfamiliarfurryfaceonemoretime,Heeverthoughtabouthavingadogofhisownsothathecouldalwaysplaywithit,buthisfatherwasallergictodogfurandtheirhousewascrowdedeventhoughhismotheralsoloveddogs.AnotherweakcryfromthesmalldogpulledLeo'sthoughtsback.Glancingathiswatch,Leorealizedhewasgoingtobelateforhisdailyplaytimeinthepark,butlookingattheinjureddog,heknewhecouldn'tjustwalkawayandleaveitaloneandsuffering.Gently,hereachedoutahand.ThedogwhimperedgIE)atfirst,butthenweaklylickedhisfingers,asifsensingthatthishumanmeantnoharm.AwaveofwarmthwashedoverLeo—hehadtosavethepoordog.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Withouthesitation,Leocarefullypickedupthedogandrushedbackhome.Asthedogrecovereddaybyday,Leostartedthinkingaboutitsfuture.
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