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高中英语作文精批半年
67.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Growingup,Iwasalwaysshyandunconfidentinmyself.Asidefrommyparents,Ifeltothersfoundmyshynessdifficulttoaccept.Itusedtobesomethingthataffectedmylifeinthemostnegativewaypossible.ItmademeunabletotalkinanysettinginwhichIfeltuncomfortable.ThismeansthatIwasn’tevenabletospeakinclass,chatwithmyfriends,ordermyownfood,etc.Atthe5thgrade,myparentsmovedtoaneighbouringcitybecauseofthejobrelocationandIchangedschools.Ifoundmyselfinanewclassroomwithanewteacher,whomwecalledMs.S,surroundedby30newfaces.Thiswasfairlyterrifying.AndsowhenIwasaskedtostandupandintroducemyself,Iwastrembling.Stillthen,Iwaslabelledas“shyandquiet”.Ididn’thavealotoffriends,onlyspokeinclassifIreallyhadto,kepteverythingtomyself,avoidedpublicevents,andpanickedbadlyatthethoughtoforalpresentationsinclass.Thishaunted(萦绕)meuntiloneday,Ms.Sannouncedinclassthateachofuswasgoingtobesingingasoloinfrontoftheclass.I’dhadnoideathatthiswasgoingtohappen.Whenitwasmyturn,shecalledmeuptothefront,instructedthepianoplayertobeginandIveryunwillinglysang“Cuckoo,cuckoo,praywhatdoyoudo...”inabarelyaudible,high-pitchedvoice,withtherestofsilentchildrenstaringupatme.Ms.Sstoodnexttothepiano,saying:“Louder!Louder!”ButIdidn’tknowhowtoprojectmyvoice;Icouldn’tmakeitanylouder.Iwasreallyupsetatit.Icriedforafewhours.Isuspectedmychildhoodshynesswaslargelyunsupportedinthenewschool.Thisevenmademenotwanttogotoschool.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Afterschool,Ms.Saskedmetogointoheroffice.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Itookherwordforitandsomethingshiftedforme.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第一段正文：Ireallydidn'tknowhowtofacethisnewteacher:willshescoldmeorcriticiseme?Ifeltterriblyfrightenedandcouldn'tlookstraightathereyes.Then,hersmoothvoiceoccuredintomymind--"Everystudenthasanuniquecharacter.Itdoesn'tmatterwhetherheisshyoroutspoken."Icouldn'tbelievemyearsandstaredatMsSwithasenseofgratitude."Youarethemostconsiderateandpatientstudent,sowouldyouliketobecomeanewmonitor?"MsSsmiled.第二段正文：WhenIleftheroffice,Iwasnotonlyashynewstudent,butamonitorwhoneedtotaketheresponsibility.Tokeepthewholeclassfollowingtherules,Ihadtoraisemyvoiceanddealwithdifferentstuffandproblems.Dutytransformedmefromashyandquietstudenttoanconfidentandresponsiblemonitor.
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2025-09-21 1 评论 0 喜欢
高中英语作文精批半年
66.假定你是李华，上周六你在动物救助站参加了志愿服务活动。请你给英国朋友Chris写一封邮件分享此次活动，内容包括：1.服务内容；2.你的感受。注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。DearChris,I’mwritingtosharewithyoumyvolunteeringinananimalshelterlastSaturday._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,LiHua我的正文：Itwasreallyafullday.Inthemorning,Iservedasanursetohelpthedoctorperformanoperationonawoundeddog.Luckily,thepoordogwassavedduetoourefforts.Intheafternoon,Itookcareofitcarefullyandsentitfreshfood.Intheevening,wephoneditsownerthathecouldtakehisdogtwodayslater.Afteratiringandmeaningfulday,Ifeelproudofmyself.Weshouldconsidertheanimalsasoursincerefriends.IreallyhopethatIcanaccompanytheselovelyanimalseveryday.
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2025-09-21 0 评论 0 喜欢
高中英语作文精批半年
第一节(满分15分)假定你是李华。你校即将开设英语角，校英文报现面向全体学生征集建议请你写一封信，内容包括:1.提供建议(如时间、地点、主题等)；2.表达期待。注意:写作词数应80左右。DearEditor,Iamwritingtooffermysuggestionsonthenew-builtEnglishCornerinourschool.TheEnglishCornerisasplendlidplatformtoshareexcelentEnglisharticlesandpractiseouroralabilities.ItwouldbeappropriateforourEnglishnewspapertoholdtheEngishCornerfrom7p.m.to9p.m.onSaturdayseveryweek.ThesituableplaceisRoom301whichwasdesignedfortheEnglishClub.Thethemescouldbechangedbasedondifferentseasonsandfestivals,morerelevanttoourdailylives.TosupportEnglishCorner'seffort,ourEnglishnewspapercouldpublishsomeexcellentEnglishwritingsfromthemembersofourEnglishCorner.IreallyhopeSchoolEnglishCornercanbefoundedsucefully.Lookingforwardtoacceptmyfeedback.
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2025-09-14 2 评论 0 喜欢
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