初中中英文名师班96 满分15分，按中考作文批改评分并指出错误地方，请深圳中学老师帮批改。Asastudent,Ioftenthinkabouthowtobeabetterperson.Forme,I'mgetwellinflowingtherule.Ialsolikeinventsomethingandbeinterestedindoingsports.Thismakemegetwellintheschoollifeandhaveahealthybody.ButIalsonotbeenoughinsomething,suchmyrelationship.Icouldn'tgetwellinexpressmyselfandIcouldn'tmakeconversationwitheachother.Thismakemehaven'tlotsoffriendsandoftenfeellonely.Ican'tfixmyproblemswitheachotherinagoodwaythismakemefellunhappy.Toimprovemyself,IthinkImustkeepmygoodpoints.Imustkeeptofollowtheruleandkeeptheinventinterest.AlsoImustreadmuchbooks.trymuchwaystoimprovemyrelationship! 学霸喵_473 2026-01-21 1 评论 0 喜欢
英文作文精批润色10篇 67.Paragraph1:JustasIwasabouttoturnandrun,twopoliceofficersarrivedonthescene.NosoonerdidthemsawthethemethatIwasavoidtheattackofcow,thantheywantedtousethegun."No!itcan'tbeeffective."Ishoutedtothepoliceofficersinaserioustoneandrunningtired.Suddenly,aredclothesattractedmyattention.Catchingtheclothes,flowingitandrunningbesideatree,aideaechoedinmyheart."Comeon,baby!"Itoldtothecowwithtricky.Itcamewithabigpowertome,andthen,thetreecontrolleditsbonesandthepoliceofficerusedtoolsreducetherisk.Whatanunforgettableexperience.Paragraph2:Afterwemanagedtosecurethecowtoatree,webegantodiscusswhattodowithit.Twopoliceofficersadvicethatthecowshouldbekilledbythegun.Irefused.MyhearttoldmethatImustmadethiscreaturealive.Sonervouswasmethatmyhandsshakingquickly.Thesecondchance,Ididit.Thecowbecamecalmandtheangerdisappear.Asenseofrelaxingandtiredhitme.ButIgavemydaughteraclass.Everycreaturehasthechancetolive.NeverbeforehadIgotsuchauniqueexperience,whichwasengravedinmymindandhadaprofoundinfluenceonmydaughterintherestofherlife. 学霸君_177 2026-01-21 1 评论 0 喜欢
英文作文精批润色10篇 第二节读后续写（满分25分）67.Paragraph1:JustasIwasabouttoturnandrun,twopoliceofficersarrivedonthescene.NosoonerdidthemsawthethemethatIwasavoidtheattackofcow,thantheywantedtousethegun."No!itcan'tbeeffective."Ishoutedtothepoliceofficersinaserioustoneandrunningtired.Suddenly,aredclothesattractedmyattention.Catchingtheclothes,flowingitandrunningbesideatree,aideaechoedinmyheart."Comeon,baby!"Itoldtothecowwithtricky.Itcamewithabigpowertome,andthen,thetreecontrolleditsbonesandthepoliceofficerusedtoolsreducetherisk.Whatanunforgettableexperience.Paragraph2:Afterwemanagedtosecurethecowtoatree,webegantodiscusswhattodowithit.Twopoliceofficersadvicethatthecowshouldbekilledbythegun.Irefused.MyhearttoldmethatImustmadethiscreaturealive.Sonervouswasmethatmyhandsshakingquickly.Thesecondchance,Ididit.Thecowbecamecalmandtheangerdisappear.Asenseofrelaxingandtiredhitme.ButIgavemydaughteraclass.Everycreaturehasthechancetolive.NeverbeforehadIgotsuchauniqueexperience,whichwasengravedinmymindandhadaprofoundinfluenceonmydaughterintherestofherlife. 学霸君_177 2026-01-21 1 评论 0 喜欢
英文作文精批润色10篇 officersarrivedonthescene.NosoonerdidthemsawthethemethatIwasavoidtheattackofcow,thantheywantedtousethegun."No!itcan'tbeeffective."Ishoutedtothepoliceofficersinaserioustoneandrunningtired.Suddenly,aredclothesattractedmyattention.Catchingtheclothes,flowingitandrunningbesideatree,aideaechoedinmyheart."Comeon,baby!"Itoldtothecowwithtricky.Itcamewithabigpowertome,andthen,thetreecontrolleditsbonesandthepoliceofficerusedtoolsreducetherisk.Whatanunforgettableexperience.Paragraph2:Afterwemanagedtosecurethecowtoatree,webegantodiscusswhattodowithit.Twopoliceofficersadvicethatthecowshouldbekilledbythegun.Irefused,MyhearttoldmethatImustmadethiscreaturealive.Sonervouswasmethatmyhandsshakingquickly.Thesecondchance,Ididit.Thecowbecamecalmandtheangerdisappear.Asenseofrelaxingandtiredhitme.ButIgavemydaughteraclass:Everycreaturehasthechancetolive.NeverbeforehadIgotsuchauniqueexperience,whichwasengravedinmymindandhadaprofoundinfluenceonmydaughterintherestofherlife. 学霸君_177 2026-01-20 3 评论 0 喜欢
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